Sunday, March 27, 2011

SIX SENTENCE SUNDAY~9

Today, my six comes from my unpubbed book, Dating 911.  Jett has some explaining to do...

Propelled forward by her empathy, she stood before him and grasped his chin. With a gentle tug, she twisted his head first right, then left taking in the damage. Laceration just above the left eye. Eyelid several shades of purple-- puffy and swollen. With a fingertip, she gently touched the corner of his lip where the tissue was cut in the corner. He winced. “You want to talk about who rearranged your face?”



His expression turned to stone.  “Nothing more than I deserved.”

Okay, that's the tease!  Don't forget to stop by this link for more snippets from more authors participating in Six Sentence Sunday!

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Enjoy the rest of your weekend!
Kathleen

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24 comments:

  1. Jessica E. SubjectMarch 27, 2011 at 3:39 AM

    Great excerpt, but I want more. :)

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  2. Sarah GrimmMarch 27, 2011 at 7:25 AM

    What did he do? I want to know.

    Great snippet!

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  3. Aislinn KerryMarch 27, 2011 at 8:09 AM

    Great lines! :)

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  4. Cate MastersMarch 27, 2011 at 8:27 AM

    Great teaser! Hope to read more.

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  5. UnknownMarch 27, 2011 at 8:58 AM

    Great six. Need to know what he did!

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  6. JoAnne KenrickMarch 27, 2011 at 9:00 AM

    And what a tease it was, totally left me wanting to carry on reading! Nice six x

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  7. Susanna FraserMarch 27, 2011 at 9:32 AM

    Nice six, descriptive and emotional.

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  8. LindsayMarch 27, 2011 at 10:07 AM

    Great snippet. Not to mention a great tease for more.

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  9. Jayel KayeMarch 27, 2011 at 10:14 AM

    he must have done something really bad

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  10. Chrystalla ThomaMarch 27, 2011 at 11:31 AM

    Love it! Great post!

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  11. ArleneMarch 27, 2011 at 11:56 AM

    Awesome of her checking him out. You could lose one reference to corner, when she looks at his swollen lip. The dialogue works perfectly. Hope you post more!

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  12. Pip GreenMarch 27, 2011 at 12:59 PM

    Nice six. :)

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  13. Lauri J OwenMarch 27, 2011 at 1:27 PM

    Uh oh! Sounds like big trouble! Enjoyed the six!

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  14. Cara BristolMarch 27, 2011 at 1:49 PM

    Nice snippet.

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  15. Lisa FoxMarch 27, 2011 at 4:32 PM

    Sounds like someone wasn't playing nicely. Great snippet!

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  16. Marie DeesMarch 27, 2011 at 4:37 PM

    Love his answer because I wonder what he's been up to.

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  17. Laura KayeMarch 27, 2011 at 5:45 PM

    Ooh, I'd definitely want more from that. And geez, more of that pic too!

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  18. Vivien JacksonMarch 27, 2011 at 5:56 PM

    Oh, YAY! I love tortured (emotionally, physically, take your pick) heroes. So looking forward to reading more of this!

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  19. UnknownMarch 27, 2011 at 6:03 PM

    Arlene, that part of the assessment bumped me, too! Thanks!

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  20. AnonymousMarch 27, 2011 at 6:24 PM

    Love the dialog. A very intriguing post.

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  21. Luxie RyderMarch 27, 2011 at 6:40 PM

    Great six!

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  22. Ella DrakeMarch 28, 2011 at 12:20 PM

    Great description. And ouch! His poor face. I'd like to know who rearranged it, too!

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  23. Lucy FelthouseMarch 28, 2011 at 1:04 PM

    A tease indeed! Great six :)

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  24. blueroseMarch 29, 2011 at 8:09 PM

    wonderfully descriptive

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