Sunday, August 21, 2011

SIX SENTENCE SUNDAY~27

Thanks for stopping by.  I am honored that you'd spend part of your Sunday with me.  And now a little something I pulled from a drawer and dusted off. My first endeavor at writing the great American novel which was rejected. Maybe after my Dating Series is completed I will overhaul it and sub it again.  Tentatively titled "A Premonition of Murder".

He was coming for her.

The realization jolted her from her vision. Her head reeled with fresh pain and she choked back the bitter bile that rushed into her mouth.  She glanced at the clock on the wall behind her desk.



He.  Was.  Coming.

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Enjoy the rest of your Sunday!
Kathleen
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24 comments:

  1. Jessica E. SubjectAugust 21, 2011 at 3:30 AM

    Great pacing and very intriguing!

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  2. Lisa FoxAugust 21, 2011 at 6:12 AM

    Creepy! I totally feel the fear and tension!

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  3. AnonymousAugust 21, 2011 at 7:29 AM

    I smell the fear in her heart and what happens next. Great six!

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  4. Gem SivadAugust 21, 2011 at 8:09 AM

    Talk about suspense. Great six!

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  5. Taryn KincaidAugust 21, 2011 at 8:18 AM

    Oh, yeah. Definitely dust this off. You should.

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  6. D CarneyAugust 21, 2011 at 9:29 AM

    Oh no! Very chilling!

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  7. Angela S. StoneAugust 21, 2011 at 9:37 AM

    Ooo

    Very interesting!

    Why is he coming? and who is coming?
    *ponders*

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  8. Zee MonodeeAugust 21, 2011 at 9:42 AM

    This had my heart beating wildly! You should definitely dust it off! :)

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  9. LindsayAugust 21, 2011 at 11:10 AM

    Great pacing. Love how you emphasized the last three words. That really adds to the tension

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  10. Vivien DeanAugust 21, 2011 at 2:14 PM

    The punctuation really helps build the tension. Thanks for sharing!

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  11. Cate MastersAugust 21, 2011 at 4:36 PM

    Intense! And intriguing - how did she know?

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  12. UnknownAugust 21, 2011 at 5:06 PM

    I love the pave of your scene.

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  13. LauraAugust 21, 2011 at 5:12 PM

    Oh, I really liked the voice and the pace. Very nice Six.

    Laura

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  14. Sarah GrimmAugust 21, 2011 at 5:20 PM

    Oooh, I want more!

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  15. An Open BookAugust 21, 2011 at 5:21 PM

    PERFECT suspense- I could feel her emotion- great 6
    Dawne P

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  16. SummerAugust 21, 2011 at 5:21 PM

    Very nice - leaves us wanting much more!!

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  17. Kellie KamrynAugust 21, 2011 at 5:31 PM

    I think everyone said what I wanted to say, but it does leave me wanting to know what happens next!

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  18. UnknownAugust 21, 2011 at 5:53 PM

    Thanks everyone for sharing your thoughts! I may need to rework out the kinks in this one when my dating series is complete.

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  19. Monica Enderle PierceAugust 21, 2011 at 11:00 PM

    Love how the pace of those last three words seems to echo the ticking clock. Nice six!

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  20. BreeAugust 22, 2011 at 4:59 AM

    Great tension!

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  21. 1000th.monkeyAugust 22, 2011 at 10:31 AM

    I like the bitter bile line, that she's having such a strong physical reaction to the vision.

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  22. Jayel KayeAugust 22, 2011 at 10:58 AM

    wow. That realy grabbed me

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  23. gemma parkesAugust 23, 2011 at 8:19 AM

    Wonderful, creepy! Great six!

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  24. lexcadeAugust 24, 2011 at 10:38 AM

    That gave me chills! Great six.

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