Wednesday, January 16, 2013

HUMP DAY HOOK~12~

Welcome Hump Day Humpers!  This week's hook pick's up the morning after the meeting in the bar. Setup:  My heroine is hungover, can't remember the name of the handsome stranger whose bed she'd woken up in, is late for her first clinical, and is dragged into a room to assist a surgeon who has mistaken her for the nurse.  Poor Anne, the drama in her life is just about to spin out of control... 
 
As she approached, the scent of rotted flesh slammed into her nostrils.  The dry, whole grain bagel she'd choked down earlier sloshed around in her stomach.  The patient's belly looked like someone had sliced him from stem to stern, the flesh halved and gaped open.  The tissue within oozed yellowish puss and bilious fluid.  Anne wretched and squeezed her eyes shut, covering her mouth with her hand.  Don’t puke.  Don’t puke.  Don’t puke. Please God!  I will be a good girl from now on, just help me out here, would ya?  Prayers unanswered, she pivoted as her breakfast rushed from her stomach.  In her haste to escape, she bumped into a solid mass which loosened her grip from her mouth.  She clasped her arms around her waist as she bent and spewed her breakfast right there in the room.  A loud splat echoed off the tiled floor.

            "Hey!" A familiar male baritone exclaimed.

     Well, that's it! Hope you enjoyed! Don't forget to get the rest of your hump on with the rest of the fabulous authors participating in this week's #HDH here: http://kerriannecoombes.wordpress.com/hump-day-hook-participant-list/
Happy Humping!
Kathleen

26 comments:

  1. AH GAHD!!!!! I was eating my breakfast!!!!! What is wrong with you??? LOL Nicely done, CP x

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    1. Well...Kerrianne... **squirms in her seat** I can't help myself! Lol. Next time I will put a disclaimer! I'm sure when you get this to crit you will have lots of red! Lol

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  2. What a barf scene! I loved it...lol! Great hook, can not wait to see who she puked on. :o)

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    1. Haha, Michelle, that's next week's hook! You will never believe it! Okay...maybe you already know! **winks**

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  3. Aak! Great description! I have to know what happens next! :)

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    1. Taryn, very Ewww! But I've seen a lot of open belly wounds that are infected over the years. An apt description!

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  5. Aww man! That was a nasty excerpt to read while I eat breakfast LOL

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    1. Aww! Sorry Sandra! We nurses eat and talk about disgusting stuff all the time. Didn't even cross my mind about peeps eating breakfast...bad bad me!

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  6. AH!! LOL! Oh man, how horrifying in a room full of people. GREAT descriptions...very vivid. I love this!

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  7. lolol... I didn't particularly enjoy this scene as I read it right after dinner ;) but it was a great one nonetheless!

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    1. That seems to be the consensus...wonder if editor will edit it out? Hmmm...

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  8. Glad I was only thinking about dinner, not eating it. LOL. Nice description. It made me feel for that poor girl.

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    1. Thanks, Flossie! In glad I was able to make you feel for Anne's plight!

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  9. Tasty... lol well done, quite... vivid. Could almost smell it myself :/ haha

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  10. *dies* OMFG really! ahahahha Sorry. I really feel for her. I do! I'm guessing she'd ralfed all over the dude she spent the night with, eh? LOL

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  11. Whoa...I wasn't expecting that! LOL. Sounds like her life is already a little out of control, and now you're going to torture the poor girl more? Good job. Obviously there's no shortage of conflict and emotion in the story.

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    1. Thank you Christina! Anne leads a life full if drama. Lol

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  12. Oh NO! How embarrassing for her!

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