Live!
Warm tears streamed down Rachel O’Dea’s face. She pumped on Seamus Jameson’s chest and tried to swallow the pain and helplessness that formed the lump in her throat. She couldn’t even verbally call out the concise compressions to the code team anymore. It was all she could do to maintain composure and continue to assist.
Her gaze shot to the cardiac monitor reading his oxygen level, blood pressure, and heartbeat.
Come on, Seamus. I need something to work with here. Give me a sign. Beat, dammit!
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Enjoy what's left of your weekend! Left you all with a little hawtness to oggle! I do love my firemen, and this one reminds me of my firefighter hero, Jett Avery in Dating 911!! *Wink*
Kathleen
20 comments:
A fast-paced and emotional excerpt! Great job! The picture is smokin' too.
Very emotional. Great job, Kathleen. Any plans to finish it?
Emotion-packed snippet - well done! It must be terrible, as a rescue worker, to find someone you love needing medical attention. Hope he can give her attention later!
One minor suggestion - I tripped up a bit on Seamus Jameson (read it aloud) though I love the name!
Sarah~I wrote myself into a corner and have to rethink the entire plot. I can't plot to save my life, LOL. That is why I shelved it. I still love the concept I started with, so yes. I will pull it out and overhaul it someday. Have to finish my other projects first.
Cate~The introduction of names at the opening of a manuscript is always a debate. Some put first and last names when they first introduce them, others don't. What are your thoughts on this? Since this particular patient is a personal favorite of my heroine, she has become attached to him. Happens more often than not and is extremely difficult for us as we love a family and a patient we see often. But I think that she would just think of him as "Seamus". Right?
Very intense. And I LOVE the fireman. Nice!
I got choked up with her. Live dammit!
Oh my gosh! SO intense.
Yep, very intense opening. I also love the title, Sunshine After Showers.
Wow, can't get more suspenseful than life and death! The pic made me smile and think of an ER nurse friend who was doing some kind of CPR training with a group of firefighters. She called them "sparky dogs" and said everyone had to be reminded to use the mouth-protecting gear.
Trust me, Lynne. In a real life code--where secretions are flying--NO ONE forgets to use the bag/valve mask for respirations! LOL
Wow. Been there. Done that. Thought that when doing compressions. You really brought the scene to life.
This brings the readers right in and makes us care enough to want to read more. Great job.
Wow! Way to throw us right into the action.
Wow, very tense and emotional!
Very good. I think you should pull this WIP back out.
Heartrending six. Such a horrible situation to be in.
Great emotion in this snippet!
Emotional. One can't help but empathize with her. Awesome six!
A very intense opening and something unexpected. I like her struggle and their immediate connection. Draws you right in. Nice!
wow! stormy from the start - intriguing!
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