Sunday, August 21, 2011

SIX SENTENCE SUNDAY~27

Thanks for stopping by.  I am honored that you'd spend part of your Sunday with me.  And now a little something I pulled from a drawer and dusted off. My first endeavor at writing the great American novel which was rejected. Maybe after my Dating Series is completed I will overhaul it and sub it again.  Tentatively titled "A Premonition of Murder".

He was coming for her.

The realization jolted her from her vision. Her head reeled with fresh pain and she choked back the bitter bile that rushed into her mouth.  She glanced at the clock on the wall behind her desk.



He.  Was.  Coming.

As always, stop by http://www.sixsunday.com/ to read snippets from some really talented authors!

Enjoy the rest of your Sunday!
Kathleen

24 comments:

Jessica Subject said...

Great pacing and very intriguing!

Lisa Fox said...

Creepy! I totally feel the fear and tension!

Ray Sostre said...

I smell the fear in her heart and what happens next. Great six!

Gem Sivad said...

Talk about suspense. Great six!

Taryn Kincaid said...

Oh, yeah. Definitely dust this off. You should.

Dee Carney said...

Oh no! Very chilling!

Angela S. Stone said...

Ooo

Very interesting!

Why is he coming? and who is coming?
*ponders*

Zee Monodee said...

This had my heart beating wildly! You should definitely dust it off! :)

Lindsay said...

Great pacing. Love how you emphasized the last three words. That really adds to the tension

Vivien Dean said...

The punctuation really helps build the tension. Thanks for sharing!

Cate Masters said...

Intense! And intriguing - how did she know?

Pablo Michaels said...

I love the pave of your scene.

Laura said...

Oh, I really liked the voice and the pace. Very nice Six.

Laura

Sarah Grimm said...

Oooh, I want more!

An Open Book said...

PERFECT suspense- I could feel her emotion- great 6
Dawne P

Summer said...

Very nice - leaves us wanting much more!!

Kellie Kamryn said...

I think everyone said what I wanted to say, but it does leave me wanting to know what happens next!

Kathleen Grieve said...

Thanks everyone for sharing your thoughts! I may need to rework out the kinks in this one when my dating series is complete.

Monica Enderle Pierce said...

Love how the pace of those last three words seems to echo the ticking clock. Nice six!

Bree said...

Great tension!

1000th.monkey said...

I like the bitter bile line, that she's having such a strong physical reaction to the vision.

Jayel Kaye said...

wow. That realy grabbed me

gemma parkes said...

Wonderful, creepy! Great six!

lexcade said...

That gave me chills! Great six.