SIX SENTENCE SUNDAY~27
Thanks for stopping by. I am honored that you'd spend part of your Sunday with me. And now a little something I pulled from a drawer and dusted off. My first endeavor at writing the great American novel which was rejected. Maybe after my Dating Series is completed I will overhaul it and sub it again. Tentatively titled "A Premonition of Murder".
He was coming for her.
The realization jolted her from her vision. Her head reeled with fresh pain and she choked back the bitter bile that rushed into her mouth. She glanced at the clock on the wall behind her desk.
He. Was. Coming.
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Enjoy the rest of your Sunday!
Kathleen
24 comments:
Great pacing and very intriguing!
Creepy! I totally feel the fear and tension!
I smell the fear in her heart and what happens next. Great six!
Talk about suspense. Great six!
Oh, yeah. Definitely dust this off. You should.
Oh no! Very chilling!
Ooo
Very interesting!
Why is he coming? and who is coming?
*ponders*
This had my heart beating wildly! You should definitely dust it off! :)
Great pacing. Love how you emphasized the last three words. That really adds to the tension
The punctuation really helps build the tension. Thanks for sharing!
Intense! And intriguing - how did she know?
I love the pave of your scene.
Oh, I really liked the voice and the pace. Very nice Six.
Laura
Oooh, I want more!
PERFECT suspense- I could feel her emotion- great 6
Dawne P
Very nice - leaves us wanting much more!!
I think everyone said what I wanted to say, but it does leave me wanting to know what happens next!
Thanks everyone for sharing your thoughts! I may need to rework out the kinks in this one when my dating series is complete.
Love how the pace of those last three words seems to echo the ticking clock. Nice six!
Great tension!
I like the bitter bile line, that she's having such a strong physical reaction to the vision.
wow. That realy grabbed me
Wonderful, creepy! Great six!
That gave me chills! Great six.
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