Wednesday, January 16, 2013

HUMP DAY HOOK~12~

Welcome Hump Day Humpers!  This week's hook pick's up the morning after the meeting in the bar. Setup:  My heroine is hungover, can't remember the name of the handsome stranger whose bed she'd woken up in, is late for her first clinical, and is dragged into a room to assist a surgeon who has mistaken her for the nurse.  Poor Anne, the drama in her life is just about to spin out of control... 
 
As she approached, the scent of rotted flesh slammed into her nostrils.  The dry, whole grain bagel she'd choked down earlier sloshed around in her stomach.  The patient's belly looked like someone had sliced him from stem to stern, the flesh halved and gaped open.  The tissue within oozed yellowish puss and bilious fluid.  Anne wretched and squeezed her eyes shut, covering her mouth with her hand.  Don’t puke.  Don’t puke.  Don’t puke. Please God!  I will be a good girl from now on, just help me out here, would ya?  Prayers unanswered, she pivoted as her breakfast rushed from her stomach.  In her haste to escape, she bumped into a solid mass which loosened her grip from her mouth.  She clasped her arms around her waist as she bent and spewed her breakfast right there in the room.  A loud splat echoed off the tiled floor.

            "Hey!" A familiar male baritone exclaimed.

     Well, that's it! Hope you enjoyed! Don't forget to get the rest of your hump on with the rest of the fabulous authors participating in this week's #HDH here: http://kerriannecoombes.wordpress.com/hump-day-hook-participant-list/
Happy Humping!
Kathleen

26 comments:

kerriannecoombes said...

AH GAHD!!!!! I was eating my breakfast!!!!! What is wrong with you??? LOL Nicely done, CP x

Michelle Hoefle said...

What a barf scene! I loved it...lol! Great hook, can not wait to see who she puked on. :o)

Kathleen Grieve said...

Well...Kerrianne... **squirms in her seat** I can't help myself! Lol. Next time I will put a disclaimer! I'm sure when you get this to crit you will have lots of red! Lol

Kathleen Grieve said...

Haha, Michelle, that's next week's hook! You will never believe it! Okay...maybe you already know! **winks**

Jessica Subject said...

Aak! Great description! I have to know what happens next! :)

Taryn Kincaid said...

Ewwwww. But great description!

Kathleen Grieve said...

Stay tuned, Jessica!

Kathleen Grieve said...

Taryn, very Ewww! But I've seen a lot of open belly wounds that are infected over the years. An apt description!

Sandra Sookoo said...

Aww man! That was a nasty excerpt to read while I eat breakfast LOL

Kathleen Grieve said...

Aww! Sorry Sandra! We nurses eat and talk about disgusting stuff all the time. Didn't even cross my mind about peeps eating breakfast...bad bad me!

Sarah said...

AH!! LOL! Oh man, how horrifying in a room full of people. GREAT descriptions...very vivid. I love this!

Ciaran Dwynvil said...

lolol... I didn't particularly enjoy this scene as I read it right after dinner ;) but it was a great one nonetheless!

Flossie Benton Rogers said...

Glad I was only thinking about dinner, not eating it. LOL. Nice description. It made me feel for that poor girl.

Phoenix Johnson said...

Tasty... lol well done, quite... vivid. Could almost smell it myself :/ haha

Kathleen Grieve said...

Thank you, Sarah!

Kathleen Grieve said...

That seems to be the consensus...wonder if editor will edit it out? Hmmm...

Kathleen Grieve said...

Thanks, Flossie! In glad I was able to make you feel for Anne's plight!

Kathleen Grieve said...

Hahaha! Thanks Phoenix!

Layna Pimentel said...

*dies* OMFG really! ahahahha Sorry. I really feel for her. I do! I'm guessing she'd ralfed all over the dude she spent the night with, eh? LOL

Christina Cole said...

Whoa...I wasn't expecting that! LOL. Sounds like her life is already a little out of control, and now you're going to torture the poor girl more? Good job. Obviously there's no shortage of conflict and emotion in the story.

Kathleen Grieve said...

Lol Layna! Tune in next week!

Kathleen Grieve said...

Thank you Christina! Anne leads a life full if drama. Lol

Talullah Rose said...

Such images... Nice one...xx

Colette Saucier said...

Oh NO! How embarrassing for her!

Kathleen Grieve said...

Just wait! It gets worse!!

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